Hi Tulasi this is a lovely piece of writing, I like how you've used lots of describing words. Maybe you could put don't instead of do not. And maybe try put more punctuation. Samirah Rm12
Apples are very nice, try a bit or a slice, if it is red or green, it will taste yummy and fresh, apples are healthy, my mum says an apple a day will keep you away from the doctors!
Water world On Friday the second of December, the road patrol children all over Hamilton got to go to waterworld, I was one of them. It was a teacher’s only day at Hamilton east school, so parents had to drive us there and two teachers. At waterworld I like going down the hydroslide the most. When I was going down the hydroslide I kept on getting water on my face and I kept on turning around. We even got free ice block and free hotdogs. It was a awesome day.
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ReplyDeleteHi Tulasi this is a lovely piece of writing, I like how you've used lots of describing words. Maybe you could put don't instead of do not. And maybe try put more punctuation.
ReplyDeleteSamirah Rm12