Hi Tulasi this is a lovely piece of writing, I like how you've used lots of describing words. Maybe you could put don't instead of do not. And maybe try put more punctuation. Samirah Rm12
Apples are very nice, try a bit or a slice, if it is red or green, it will taste yummy and fresh, apples are healthy, my mum says an apple a day will keep you away from the doctors!
Flowers I plant a little seed in the cold, cold ground, out comes the big round yellow sun, down come the raindrops soft and fast, out comes my flowers, grow, grow, grow.
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ReplyDeleteHi Tulasi this is a lovely piece of writing, I like how you've used lots of describing words. Maybe you could put don't instead of do not. And maybe try put more punctuation.
ReplyDeleteSamirah Rm12